swimming pool

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6 Responses to swimming pool

  1. potte says:

    Well done Sude. Its really funny. There’s no full stops but its a great piece of work

  2. woods says:

    very funny sude it was a lovely poem. good rhymes remember to add more detail!

  3. 8AB6D says:

    :] well done you used good rhyming couplets . next time but full stop at the end but an amazing work hardly any errors

  4. avejv says:

    rhyming’s were good.
    funny work.
    next time use connectives

  5. omord says:

    It is extremely funny I wanted to read on but sadly it ended very good and it rhymes.

  6. E255C says:

    Well done Sude i enjoyed it lot looks like a good poem that deserves to be publish as a book. next time put full stops but overall amazing.

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